sponsirship pitch to Snapple.Dr pepper company about Venom

the oppourtunity for you company would be the ability to branch your product out to the paintball community.
most companies never learn that paintball is played by over 5 million people yearly. it has actually become a multimillion dollar sport.
by sponsoring our team and letting us endorse your product we would be reaching numerous amounts of people monthly about your energy drink.
at least once a month my team plays a game with over 400 people attending. just 1 person looking at one of our 16 people drinking the drink could spark a huge interest in the drink.
this truly is a huge opportunity for both you and us. you could grant us a sponsorship as simple as coupons for cheaper venom so we could use your products on and off the field/ i thank you for reading all this and hope you take all of this into consideration
thank you
Mike - Team Captain



what you guys think?

Sorry I'm a bit late in posting but fix your punctuation/grammar/spelling and start off like Zis

To (what ever the persons name is if you have it or whom it may concern if not),

I am Mike Stewart, captain of Southern Maryland Arch Angles. I have an opportunity for your company that would allow them to branch your product out to the paintball community and it's spectators.